my first RPG game!!

this game is my first game i'm going to make .please write your topics that i can improve it

-story:

in towns,cities,villages or in the other word whole the world was in peace.at least,people thought like that! when they knew that the world wasn't very safe,and they were in a big threat, they tried to solve the problem but it was harder than they thought.they didn't know anything about their enemy.even they weren't sure this creature was existing.but they saw with their eyes:the world was destroying.but who did do that?why?nobody knew but this story wasn't just about their world,something more....

and now,it's time to awaking,for the real heroes.before the world burn in darkness,without any warning.



-characters:

there are many characters so i include the main ones

Roman
age:23
genre:male
class:fighter
kind:human

he is a young boy with a little experience in fight and of course,he isn't ready to fight with demons.




Electra
age:20
genre:female
class:lancer
kind:elf

she is roman's girlfriend.she and roman live together and her family aren't happy about this.




Note:Roman and Electra are main characters of my game and they are NOT from other games

Marine(in millenium series if you played it)
age:22
genre:female
class:fighter
kind:human

she is mystrock's queen.




Mel(in aveyond 3 series if you played it)
age:20
genre:female
class:mage
kind:human

she is a darkthrop,and after many practice she became a powerful mage.she was a thief first and when she found her power,changed her way




-features:
18+ characters
20+ side quests
familiar characters form 5 different games

-Credits:

Enterbrain for RPG Maker xp,RPG Maker vx

audio:Laxius force,millennium,aveyond,walz music

graphic: http://untamed.wild-refuge.net/rmxpresources.php?characters,saehral,daeva-agas
kozuki yone,Celianna,Lunarea ,Mack,jakeyblacksoul

aldorlea games

amaranthia games

dancing dragon games



-screenshot:










special thanks :

Elini

daeva-ages

amanda fitch



i have permission for use these artworks

(remove the *)

You can post pictures with the [*img][/img] code. All you need is to upload your picture to Facebook, and your forum (you can create a free forum and be able to upload photos (Click here to do so)) are some free ways I know how to upload pictures.

Like this for instance.



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Makes this v


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It's much easier and less hassle to view them.

But you can get an idea of formatting this topic here. That is my game topic. It is layered down into sections. Maybe you can make yours easier to read if you read one of the stickied topics.

Or, you could just do the [img width=pixel number]picture url[/ img] (remove spaces)

NEVER use Facebook to upload screencaps. THEY LOOK AWFUL.

Nice maps, btw.

thanks for your help,got it!

just noticed this game.. it looks cool.. definitely gonna play this!!

*twitch twitch*

The art style-clash. It buuuurns

I'm sorry, as an artist it's just a bit painful to see mismatched art style.

On the plus side, the maps look REALLY nice.

sorry daeva_agas but i can't understand your mean.
do you mean character's graphic don't have match together???

YES, your character graphics OBVIOUSLY do not match!!! You just took them from whatever game they're from and/or other sources and use them as is!

I'm not sure what YOU see, but to my eyes they're obviously very different! The Laxius Force people are coloured with coloured pencils, Marine is done in soft-CG, and "Cade" (whose picture is Mello from Death Note) is done in markers. Mello/Cade and Marine are almost similarly smooth, but they still have different art and colouring style.

Also, do have a someone to check your writing. Some people are going to be bothered by the lack of capitalization. Do you... just do that because of forum-speak or are you from somewhere that write with special characters? You know, like Arabic, Hindi, Korean, or Chinese?

ok.i will improve it

where can i find soft-CG?

*sigh* It's not as easy as that. I do soft CG too, but it looks different from other people's soft CG. Hardly any two people do the same art style unless they do it on purpose, like animators for a TV show.

It would do you better to just go find somebody who makes a batch of characters and use them.

Like this. All the people are drawn by the same person, so the style more or less matches. Oh, you should CREDIT the artist. The pictures I linked are made by a Chinese/Japanese artist who goes by the name "櫻野露". Hopefully the characters show up on your website.

Some more pictures that I personally liked:
-Made by 伊藤佐也
- made by papawsnancy
- Made by 可蘿露卡露琪

thank for your helps.this is the last update of my game and i hope you enjoy it.i'm waiting for your comments to improve my game

Now the Mel picture is out of place

I really can't help you here. All my Mel pictures have Gyendal in it too.

it is ok,no problem,send them to me please.i try to cut Gyendal from it
thank you sooooooo much

Nope, it's IMPOSSIBLE. You can't cut Gy out without ruining Mel:

yes,it is impossible so i have to use last image. but if i find better image,i replace it and if you find something too,please send it for me
thanks a lot

for mel's image,witch is better?

1)mel's image in menu of aveyond 3 darkthrop prophecy

2)mel's image in menu of aveyond 3 gates of night

The gates of Night one, definitely. But it's a painted style. It doesn't gel with the rest of the artworks.

i know and i CAN SEE those differences but there is NO WAY.if you have any idea,write this.maybe you can find a way.you have more experience.

thanks!

Dear reader!

Please give me a vote from 1 to 10 for characters,story,maps(with reason).
don't leave this topic without rate.
i need your votes
feel free.this game is for you,player!

I AM AL IVE.....I just try to don't cry!
JUST 10 MAPS ARE REMAIN.....




Now,Look at this girl.She doesn't look familiar?