Mirror World

Story Synopsis: Tom and Danny are treasure hunters from the small town of Crystalia. One day, when they explore the local mine for treasure they run into a fairy that offers them treasure if they can beat her. After beating her, instead of giving them treasure she sends them to a different world. In this new world they meet Brittany, who is willing to help them. They learn that in order to get back home they will have to seek out the different Spirits of this World and gain their favor.

World Development: In this world there are 5 islands, each having one of the Spirits on them. The people on the islands respect their spirit like they are a god because they created the island and bring the people good things. The 5 spirits are Terra, spirit of the Earth, Cyna, spirit of fire and flames, Shiva, the spirit of ice and everything cold, Ariel, the spirit of the water and Aero, the spirit of the wind.

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Character Bios:

001-Name: Tom
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Class: Thief

002 Name: Danny
Age:22
Gender:Male
Class: Archer

003- Name: Brittany
Age: 22
Gender: Female
Class: Witch

004- Name: Chrystina
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Class: Sage

005- Name: Matt
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Class: Monk

006- Name: Kenny
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Class: Spellblade

007- Name: Natalie
Age: 20
Gender: Female
Class: Archer

008- Name: Chris
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Class: Solider

009- Name: David
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Class: Samurai

010- Name: Randi
Age: 21
Gender: Female
Class: Spellblade

011-Name: Data
Age: 18
Gender: Both
Class: Priestess

012-Name: Sebastian
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Class: Spellblade

013- Name: Laki
Gender: Male
Age: 20
Class: Thief

014- Name: Elisa
Gender: Female
Age: 38
Class: Priestess

Other: You will be able to have characters romance each other. Right now the demo only goes til you finish the first island. Please give feedback on the game so far.

Credits: Alternatefantasy, shadowshed, soumyakhanna, windscimitars

Demo: http://www.4shared.com/file/2RETRDHc/Mirror_World.html

More pictures would be appreciated =___=

I will post them when I get a chance to.

Also, do make sure all the resources are in the proper place I'm not sure how you exported this, but EVERYTHING that is part of the RTP are "missing" and had to be copied over from the RTP folder

Also, the house maps are confusing. You have two rug tiles for the exit, but I can't tell which one is supposed to lead me outside because you set the event to activate with action button, not player touch. But some other transfer player events IS set to player touch. Be consistent.

The maps themselves could be a little more interesting. As of now, they're very boring.

Thank you for your input.

The rtp problem is fixed. I would like for more people to play the game.

I fixed the game so you can get into the dungeon with Terra.

I have fixed most of the errors. I would really like to have more people play the game.

I have added screen shots.

That is just pictures of your computer. To get screenshots, just use the print screen button and copy.

I was playing the game on my computer when I took those pictures.

Okay, I played the demo and here is my constructive criticism. First the technical stuff:

-stale bread recovers HP but also uses MP? Idk what that was but I'm sure it was an accident.
-There were lots of signs with absolutely nothing on them. Perhaps have them state the name of the town, or land, ect.
-it was mentioned before, but please make entrances/exits activated by player touch. Unless they're opening a door so something the action button gets repetative.

Okay, now for my overall opinion:

You have a pretty interesting basis and nice graphics to work with. I think that this could be a very interesting game. However, I honestly think you should consider taking on a writer to help with the dialogue/plot/story & character development parts. The character interactions so far are pretty boring and not very believeable. A man gave me 300 gold to "buy stuff" the first minute into the game? Perhaps he was an old veteran, down on his luck, who saw himself in the young hero and wanted to impart his last few coin to help his journey...see the difference? Anyway, I'm sure you can find someone who can spice it up while still keeping true to where you want your plot to go.

The mapping could be more varied, but with some consultation and time I'm sure you can improve.

It's a good start. With some help I think you can make a great game. Hope this helped!

Hiya, I'm just saying that the last character I was submitting is already sent, if you haven't read it yet.

And yes, looking for a writer should help very much. Especially if you're planning with character romance which might go to triangle love or something akin xD

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oh, and you actually can capture the monitor screen by pressing the print screen button. Cuz I can see your hand there :p