It's interesting and I'm glad you put in more description, but it seems more of a summary with small mentions rather than a diary entry. You could try putting some more of Edward's feelings and opinions along with other things in there..

Hope you won't get offended.

You are right. I'll be sure to put more feeling in my next entry which will be my last before GON is released

your LAST!? nooooooooooooo plzzzzzzzzz dont do this to us!

I like to hear your story
Please continue

ADVENTURE DAY 3
Dear Diary,
Today, I have seperated from Mel and Stella and am staying in Gheledon for the night. I feel sorry for leaving them and dearly want to go back but what they have done so far is even more heartless than Lydia has ever been even when she insulted the commoner for trying to talk to her
What happened was that I confronted them and asked for the truth. I gave them an opportunity to tell the truth and instead theey tell me a cock and bull story about how a vampire is trying to take over the World using some orb with the power to take away light. At least, they could have worked on a better lie. Gray must be the worst spy teacher in the world. I was right about Mel. She is a thief and Stella is not from Naylith. I left them at Naylith summit and returned to Gheledon.
Right now I feel sorry for the two girls. THey have no chance in the wilderness. Tomorrow, I will go to the junk store in Gheledon. Why? Because before leaving, I waited on the edge of the summit. They thought I had gone and talked about how I didnt even care about the world andabout blowing up a hole. So they believed in the story. But I was angry they did not tell me before. The only dynamite is in the junk store. Even though I am angry at them not trusting me, it will be better to say Sorry than go to Thais. Now I am going to sleep. Bye

Good job, let's see what happens tomorrow.

Looking forward to the rest of the entry.

updated

ADVENTURE DAY 4
Dear Diary,
Well, I was very lucky today. I went to the item's shop in the morning, waited for half an hour and left. Then, I decided to check back and Mel and Stella were entering the shop. I went in and apologized to them. This is the second time Mel has made me apologize. I don't know why I stick around her. Before meeting her, I had never apologized to anyone else. It may not take much effort but mom said a prince should never sink to the level of apologizing to commoners.
At about 11, we went and blew up the cave. Inside, we found a robe for Stella and a book in a weird language that only Stella could read. It said we had to find 4 quarter keys to get to the orb of light. After that Mel said we had to get back to Darkthrop keep in Harburg to meet the vampire friends of hers. So we went from Gheledon to Thais before we decided to stay in the Thais inn for the night. I wonder what will happen tomorrow. My 6th sense is telling me it will be a long and hard day tomorrow so I went personally to buy important items such as covey balms and about 50 haunches. Now, I am at an inn and am going to sleep
Bye

its lovely....but still u shud detail it more.

the second boys from Av who wrote a diary hehehe
wonder if it will be as good as Lars did hehehe

ADVENTURE DAY 5
Dear Diary,
I have gotten my self into real trouble tomorrow. Remember the stupid bet I made with Mel. She won. And the stupid story she told me s true as well. Looks I am going to be a hero.. I can see people telling their children, Edward Pendragon is as big a hero as Rhen.
We woke up at the inn and went to Harburg. Just as we entered the Shadow woods, Mel's first vampire friend came and told us Teijal, the vamperess was in trouble. After seeing Galahad, I was sure I had won the bet and this would bbe fun. We reached Darkthrop keep and there were two real vampires at the entrance. They killed Mel and Stella at once. I dont know why their death made me angry. I snatched stakes from Galahad's hand and killed the vampires in two fierce blows. Then I forced Cassia leaves into the dead one's mouths. It was the first death in the party ever. After that we went to Darkthrop keep and freed Teijal who was in front of a window. Just then the sun rose and I tossed the sunscreen to the burning vampires. They put it on. After tha we went to the study and I got the details of the adventure. It seems a crazy vampire is trying to take away light and rule the world. Now I see this adventure in a different light. It will end with me being in shining armour and the crowds will chant my name. But when the adventure ends I will have to become King. And this thought makes me wish the adventure goes on forever. I also feel sad that once this trip ends, I will be away fom Mel and Stella. They have become sisters to me.
Today, we are staying at Harburg and will go to Istir forest tomorrow. And Mel has just reminded me of my bet. Tomorrow is a bad, bad day.
Bye

I will try to update tomorrow, if I don't buy GON tomorrow. But then I shall be playying GON

It's gotten a bit better. Well, looking forward to your updates.

Also, to let you know, GoN will be released at midnight on -8 GMT(Pacific Time), so you probably won't get it on until August 1st.

ADVENTURE DAY 6
Dear diary,
I hate Mel. She is evil, pure evil. Now I know why Lydia hates commoners. I was her slave for the day but I am a prince. She should have some respect.
When she woke up at 12:00, she ordered me, ordered a prince to clean the inn floor. There was a disgusting rat on the floor and she put salt on it and made me eat it as lunch. How disgusting.
Then we decided to go to Stormbend to learn ice skating so we could explore Istir. Mel made me go to Lydia's home. Then she told me to slap Lydia and pretend to banish her in the best possible way. When I went near Lydia she started to hug me and I slapped her and told her "You are hereby banished for touching me". Lydia went all red and started to cry. I told her the truth and she went to Mel and started to say a harmful spell. Mel tripped Lydia and then showed her the knife. We then left the house and went to the store. There Stella, Teijal and Galahad were shopping. SHe then said she was tired and I carried her to the caves. There we found a merchant whose card had been stolen from rogues. We promised to get it back. Then we entered the caves killed many thieves and found the card thieves. Then that eveil girl told the rogues I insulted them. They all attacked me. I diead. Stella revived me and put one to sleep. Mel stabbed one, Teijal shot at one and Galahad cut one. When I revived I cut two thieves in one blow with Excalibur. It was getting late. The merchant had died so we went to stormbend. Once thier Mel made me shout at Stella and insult Teijal. She threatened to bite me if I did not shut up. Then I had to do all the shopping and skip dinner.
Mel is sleeping now and I will go for a meal now
Bye

why do you hate mel? mel and you are almost perfect for each other.

i agree though but this is really awesome!!! i like this!!!

Well, Edward will hate Mel for sometime after a day of slavery.

Will now be playing Gon for atleast two days will try to post when not playing

melxedward forever! Mel x Edward forever and ever!

theone, i agree with u for not posting. av is a gr8 game. though i like to keep on schedule. like: 1:00 - 3:00: play GoN. 4:00:update at AM. things like that.