Story Plot
Two Sisters are orphans, they are torn apart by adoption. One was cursed by light and one was cursed by darkness. 5 years later a man named Zaile created a club called DarkPath, he sent the 5 members of the club to go and help him collect the rings and stop time. Seren is sent to get her apprenticeship at the old town of Dale, Saki joins her. A wizard finds her searching in the town are looks into her soul. He insist she must go on a quest and destroy Zaile and restore time forever.

Characters
Seren ( Heroine ) : A young girl at the age of 11. Her past wasn’t so bright, Seren and her sister ( Ivy ) was cursed and her Mother was killed by Zaile, so she had to be adopted.

Ivy : A young girl at the age of 14 also Seren’s sister. She was called Ivy after her great grandma, her great grandma was a rich lady who apparently saved Rikuno village ( where she was born ). She was also cursed but with the power of darkness.

Saki : A young boy at the age of 15. He is a close friend of Seren’s ( he lives in her town. ) He lived on his own in a cottage with a few chickens, he decides to come along with Seren on her quest.

Raymond : A fairy at the age of 5 ( they only live to be 15! ). Raymond is a fairy that guides you through towns and helps you with controls ect. You can find him in towns and maybe adventure roads.

Suvana : A pretty elf age 16. She was created by Zaile's Master-Piece ( Master-Piece : A Orb that is used to create creatures such as monsters and humans, vampires, elves ect. ) she was also named after Vana an extinct flower ( made up .).
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Screenshots :
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Demo :
Please wait until the game is fully ready and out.
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Theme Song :
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3elQS3IHQjA
i dident make video or song

umm, can you clarify the description. i don't quite understand how Zaile want to destroy time and why is there something about a ring..

Ah im about to edit that. Anyways Zaile wants to control time and there are 3 rings to collect on your jorney this is to save time from Zaile.

oh, then whats Zaile's purpose in obtaining control of time? something like world domination? and why would Zaile curse the sisters?

Don't tell me it was destiny of those two sisters thats why zaile cursed them.I hate destiny games.

As for time maybe world domination but i think it should be control of time to live forever or to go in future or past.

@SarahBera - I understand most of the description but maybe you should expand it, don't you think?
For example, what Zaile wishes to achieve by controlling time, if he/she cursed the sisters because they might be the only ones to stop him/her, and why Izumi needs to find her sister (was she kidnapped or did she run away)?
For the rest, however, your game looks good. I can't say more than that for now as there are no screenshots and your description sounds muddling ^.^ But I'm sure you'll do a good job on it (you will right? )
Looking forward to more on this project! ^.^

@Valkyriet: i think the reason why Izumi needs to find her is they were adopted by different families. its already stated stated in the description.

@Kbljkl: i hate destiny games too, its getting kinda Cliché already.

lol yeah its written "they are torn apart by adoption."

@aya: I hope she will update story soon.

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Sarah wrote-

"Anyways Zaile wants to control time and there are 3 rings to collect on your jorney this is to save time from Zaile."

Here it is written that he wants to control time whereas in description its written he wants to stop it.what a mess!! And wait...I have seen in most of rpgs.How can same person curse by both light and darkness and on top of it why did he do so??

The game looks good but apart from description i didn't saw features also.

And i hope val won't start her grammar lessons.ppl are comfortable in using them and nearly most of the ppl understand what stated means according to where it is placed.

@ aya - Okay. I didn't notice that well. Thanks ^.^
@ kbljkl - I think aya used the right grammar only (your reference to "stated" ). I noticed she used "stated" twice and I understand it was a mistake. You probably got confused.
P.s. I don't get why you associate me with a grammar nazi. Besides being off-topic, it was completely unnecessary.
@ sarahbera - *still* looking forward to your game. (Just to ensure I'm not getting off-topic here) x)

It was off topic in that topic also.And don't mind it.jk

No, it was not Destiny, they were cursed because its all Zaile could manage to do because there mother was protecting them ( that bit is to be edited i will probly find time tommrow. )

Zaile's purpose is Jelously of the Mother and He wants to become a god thats why he is trying to control timeQuote:

@Kbljkl & Valkyriet: OoOops, yeah the typing was kind of a mistake, i think i paused before i continued typing and ended up re-typing the last word i wrote. XD also im thinking of making a game too i just don't know if its a good idea.

@sarahbera: im looking forward to your game too. and we are not really making a big deal out of the description just to make it clear. we are just confused right now as to what its really all about since there are holes in your story description, but still just do your best with your game and i hope to see screenshots and a more clearer synopsis of your game soon.

Yes please wait for the description update Quote:

umm why did zaile wanted to curse them?? And jelously of mother?? Needed for??

I am also waiting for your game.Do your best.I hope it will be a good game

@aya: lol which engine will you use lol.Its fun to play games.ppl usually quit their games in between because of workload and less motivation.So its fun to make one but it needs will to create one.

@Kbljkl: yeah that's the case, I lack will especially if i made a mistake i would just quit like hell, its also hard if your making your game on your own, its really a pain, but im still trying to learn.(Again) i already started before using rm2k3 but i quit because of personal problems, but now im trying to use xp and i hope i will pursue this one. i already have a story and set of characters planned.

About what SarahBera said i think she meant that Zaile is jealous of Izumi and Ivys mother.

@SarahBera: umm here are some holes you need to patch up for the story to be more clear...

1st: why will Zaile be jealous of Izumi and Ivy's mother? are they kind of related or something?
2nd: also why would she want to be a god?
3rd: what will Zaile achieve by being a god?
4th: why did Zaile choose time as a way to become a god?
5th: What is Zaile exactly? how does she think she could control time?
6th: also why do you think light is considered a curse?
7th: why didn't Zaile started trying to control time before? why didn't she just left Izumi's family alone?

there are still many holes in the story, for the questions above please use this to add more to your updated description. you can leave out some if you think its spoiling the story or if its in the twist of the story.

@aya:The questions you have asked.In them i found that question 2nd to 4th aren't neded.They are quite obvious.For me there are only three questions which matters. 1st,5th and 7th.Other questions don't need answers.And 6th one is strange.Different ppl make their rpgs in different way.Some ppl think that if light is a magic element then it may curse but thats a confusing thing O_o . But different ppl have different thoughts.

As for you game,aya, If you are ever stuck in tutorials then ask me except script matters.I had completed most of the basic tutorials for rmxp.And my trial had ended so i didn't continued it.But i still have tutorials in my mind.nd one more thing- download xp and vx both but don't install both of them.Just install the one you need.vx will help you a lot later on in the real battle field.That goes for sarah bera too.Just ask me if you are ever stuck,sarah.

@Kbljkl: the 2nd to 4th and 6th question, i just got curious XD

thanks for your offer. i will sure to ask you if ever i get problems. i will try to fix up the basic info of my game so i could make a new thread, that way i won't be spamming SarahBera's.

@SarahBera: one more question. what maker are you using by the way?

LOL curious o_O LOL

One more thing i can do indoor mapping easily.

@sarah: Lol one more question.I don't want it asap.Take your time.But there is also a list of features of your game. I don't want it asap.Just take your time.Do your best.

@Kbljkl: that's were im good at too. XD im only good at mapping but never good in eventing and the rest, especially scripting.

@SarahBerah: one more question are there only 4 playable characters?

Is it me or are we trying to throw random questions about her game so we won't get off topic? hmm XD